I'm not the most musically inclined. But I think what's throwing you off is at 1:09-1:11 you changed the bass line and it kind of throws off the beat for the rest of the song. Maybe if you take that part out and work around it, or maybe just start a whole new ending from 1:05. If you want someone to hear the song and give you some advice before you post an edit I'm all ears. So far it sounds really cool, you just hit a small wall.
To me it reminds me of an Eminem beat. So towards the style of telling a story about someone's life growing up. It should end in an uptempo beat more of a jolly feeling! Change it up!
This beat is so good. It honestly reminded me of something a rapper would be spitting crazy flows too. You should collaborate with someone to put vocals into it.
Looking at the other comments I'd say they have the right idea. Considering I listened to this with a horror movie in the background I can hear the tone of a life story. Pick up the pitch towards the end to give a more enlightening tone to the song to show a happy ending.
I really enjoyed it. It definitely has the potential to become a solid composition depending on which direction you take it. I would personally like to see it remain instrumental, unless you can find lyrics/vocals with REAL meaning. Nothing I hate more than seeing cheesy vocals ruin a song haha. I'm feeling a cosmic DnB tune--I think the tone and tempo here would make for a great intro.
I thank you guys for the advice, I have to focus on other things right now, but after school gets out I will return to this, the horror movie thing is interesting and gives me an idea for a section, hopefully I can get this all smoothed out and the beat smoother as well
I agree with Matt above-- I noticed the strange syncopation at 1:09-1:11 and wasn't sure if it was intentional or not. I think if you smoothed that part out, the song as a whole is fine as it is! Alternatively, you could extend that syncopation and use it as the inspiration for another section of the song, and go with a DnB feel as Shane suggested above. Still, very very nice so far-- I really like it!
By the way Andrew, are you good at writing piano chords to match a melody? I wrote a vocal part for a song in memory of my mom, but I have no idea how to write an instrumental for it. If you think you could help me, I'd love to collaborate with you on it! :)
I'm not the most musically inclined. But I think what's throwing you off is at 1:09-1:11 you changed the bass line and it kind of throws off the beat for the rest of the song. Maybe if you take that part out and work around it, or maybe just start a whole new ending from 1:05. If you want someone to hear the song and give you some advice before you post an edit I'm all ears. So far it sounds really cool, you just hit a small wall.
ReplyDeleteoh that part, ya I decided to hold out the first note, and thanks I take on you on that offer when I can redo this
DeleteTo me it reminds me of an Eminem beat. So towards the style of telling a story about someone's life growing up. It should end in an uptempo beat more of a jolly feeling! Change it up!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this beat that you made today. In all honesty I think it's fine just the way it is!
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This beat is so good. It honestly reminded me of something a rapper would be spitting crazy flows too. You should collaborate with someone to put vocals into it.
ReplyDeleteI think you should let it flow a bit more and have it change to a happier mood in the end.
ReplyDeleteLooking at the other comments I'd say they have the right idea. Considering I listened to this with a horror movie in the background I can hear the tone of a life story. Pick up the pitch towards the end to give a more enlightening tone to the song to show a happy ending.
ReplyDeleteI thought this song had a good melody, but the ending could of been either big or faded out softly. Otherwise it was good. Keep it up!
ReplyDeletethanks for the feedback, and the ending was the last thing I can fit, its not really the ending just the starting point of pt 2
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed it. It definitely has the potential to become a solid composition depending on which direction you take it. I would personally like to see it remain instrumental, unless you can find lyrics/vocals with REAL meaning. Nothing I hate more than seeing cheesy vocals ruin a song haha. I'm feeling a cosmic DnB tune--I think the tone and tempo here would make for a great intro.
ReplyDeleteI thank you guys for the advice, I have to focus on other things right now, but after school gets out I will return to this, the horror movie thing is interesting and gives me an idea for a section, hopefully I can get this all smoothed out and the beat smoother as well
ReplyDeleteI agree with Matt above-- I noticed the strange syncopation at 1:09-1:11 and wasn't sure if it was intentional or not. I think if you smoothed that part out, the song as a whole is fine as it is! Alternatively, you could extend that syncopation and use it as the inspiration for another section of the song, and go with a DnB feel as Shane suggested above. Still, very very nice so far-- I really like it!
ReplyDeleteBy the way Andrew, are you good at writing piano chords to match a melody? I wrote a vocal part for a song in memory of my mom, but I have no idea how to write an instrumental for it. If you think you could help me, I'd love to collaborate with you on it! :)
I actually really like it just the way it is and don't think it need to be changed at all. Good job!
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